The Couple Update 01

I have written probably 98% of the “Prologue” – all together a little more then 100,000 words.

The decision tree expanded a bit:

As you can see, nearly all decisions take place during the first day, the rest is story telling only. Each color represents one path to take. The player can decide between 5 different paths.

These paths will set the “mood” of the main game.

I did not want too many decisions… I did not want too fine tuned characteristics.
The two main characters will start the game as a couple… the prologue defines their basic relationship.

The main moral paths are now:

  • “Harmony” (green)
    They have their ups and downs during prologue, but in the end Ina and Ani are solid. They are in love and neither of them is thinking of any kind of betrayal or other partners.
  • “Little Harmony” (yellow)
    Ina is a stuck up upper class, who really only accepts Ani after he proves to be intelligent. They are in the workshop to learn about sex – and she tries other men and sees Ani as one of many…
    She is pretty emotionless and straight forward.
    She develops feelings for Ani… but only recognizes them nearly too late… after she sleeps around and cucks Ani during her femdom session.
    Ani is about to leave… when she begs him to stay.
    Ani likes being controlled, Ina likes being in control.
    In the end they appear to be pretty solid in this…
  • “Ani survived chastity” (orange)
    A path that unfolds late… Ina is trying to make Ani her slave…
    After Ani is put in “eternal” chastity… he manages to get rid of the cage… just in time before he truly would be condemned.
    Despite of that… he still likes/loves Ina, who also really likes him… she just wants to have him for ever secured…
    Ani gives Ina some of her own medicine (fucking around… cuckqueaning Ina…)…
    Ina… then begs Ani to stop and to partner up.
    Ina asks Ani to be her boyfriend…
  • “Ani is evil” (red)
    After Ani is put into chastity… and Ina is about to have him transported to his eternal enslavement…
    Ani can successfully convince Ina… that he will be the partner – REAL partner – she always dreamed of.
    Ani converts to be evil… and they put plans in action to each punish the previous sex partners of the other.
    They will be an evil and utterly ruthless pair… which (at least now) totally trusts each other.
  • “Ani & Ina – Fun” (blue)
    They partner up – but each of them are open to have sex with other partners.
    In the end it becomes more and more apparent, that Ina considers them to be “better” humans… and the lesser ones only exist to be used as tools… and to their advantage.
    Ani does not fight these thoughts.

Note!
“The universe” – is not a constant among the different paths!
In one path Ina for example might be a virgin… in other paths… she might not. Players can not assume things learned in one play through to be consistent with a play through in another path!

Very little writing in the different paths is reused – there are some passages that are reused – but not many.

Some more story snippets:

Another:


Comments

14 responses to “The Couple Update 01”

  1. Saphfire Avatar
    Saphfire

    Hm, so the only route where Ani is not a sub is the blue path?
    That doesn´t make sense, i thought the harmony path would be the Love path, how can you make Ani a Sub there?

  2. Saphfire Avatar
    Saphfire

    Ok, you even managed to ruin the blue route on the last day.
    Congratulations, if you want to turn all players away from your game, you succeeded,well done.

  3. Thanks for your comments – even if I don’t agree.

    On no path Ani is a “complete” sub. The most “subby” path is probably yellow – it is the only path he tells Ina, that he actually likes her to be in control. But even there – Ina demands of Ani to be also strong,…

    The different days have events – and the workshop ends with an orgy.
    And yes – in each version of the orgy Ina is a dominatrix and Ani is her slave.
    But that always is a “GAME”, like a theme for party – here just for the orgy – in no version of the orgy is he a real sub – they even “switch” in the end!

    They experiment – and most paths have a sub/dom day – both ways. If you can’t stand one dom day, yes then this is not for you, sorry.

    In the green (Harmony) ending they are a couple WITHOUT any other people involved. They love each other – he is NO sub.
    Where do you get the impression that Ani is a sub? (Other then the orgy game.)

    The red path – in the end he is most definitely no sub. Yes Ina in between gets pretty Dom – but he turns her around!

    If I have written these differences in a way a reader does not understand – please point me to those passages and I will revise them.

  4. Saphfire Avatar
    Saphfire

    Well it obviously is the orgy, there is no way that Ani decides to be her slave, especially not on the harmony route. It just doesn´t fit that path at all. Why does he have to be locked in a chastity cage? Why don´t just take part in the orgy but only enjoy themself? That would be believable, the cage is not. Sorry.

  5. Ok.
    I take it under advisement…

    I’ll think about it – perhaps having the orgy always in dominatrix “mode” is too much – I never looked at it that way, because for me it was always “game time”… one last act of: “I don’t care what the other people think…”

  6. Saphfire Avatar
    Saphfire

    I think if you keep it out of at least the full harmony route, this will be a great game. I like everything else about it a lot: the charackters, renders, animations but especially the dialogs are superb.

  7. Thanks!

    Haha!
    I am already on it – I guess this is why I need comments – and second opinions!

    There will probably be two “new” orgy scenes.
    Harmony – like you suggested – the two will just show the other what “harmony” is…

    And I think the evil path – I will make them both switch. Ani will be the Dom and Ina the Sub during the orgy – I think that might fit the two at their current state better.

  8. Saphfire Avatar
    Saphfire

    That´s why i prefer to communicate with dev´s instead just ignoring the game. I´ve replayed the harmony route now and i have some thoughts about it.
    On the Femdom day, i think it is too much too soon, except scat you´ve forced evey humilation at once without any indication before. I mean, yes Ani loves giving Ina orgasms, but develop this in a slave roleplay out of the blue? I am sure that many players stop playing, not only the route but your game after or even during that day. I think you need to let the players decide how far they are willing to go. I doubt many men like being forced to drink pee or anything watersports related at all. Femdom does not mean humilation there is even soft femdom, just let the players decide how far they are willing to endure, and by the way the gag is not helpful to make choices lol.
    Anyway, love your work, Regards Saphfire (yes that´s not a typo)

  9. Saphfire Avatar
    Saphfire

    Sorry, i have to write again. I don´t have another source of communication with you: Are you aware that your game was published on f95zone.to?
    I am not sure it would be wise to encourage you to participate on that site.
    If you do, please be ready for a lot of love AND hate. This will be a bloodbath. Oh, and do you plan to open a patreon account? I would support you if you do, and there will be many more then me.

  10. Thanks.
    I will think about how to handle that “better” too.

  11. What “game” are you referring to?
    I you mean “My time with her” – then yes I am aware, because I published it there myself.
    I have not added “The Couple” to F95zone – is it on there?
    I would wait, till there is more “flesh” to it.

    Same to the Patreon route. I am fairly “new” to writing VN – as you can see in my blog.

    I have no real workflow yet, and I can’t really say how much time I have to spend on the prologue till I get to the real game.
    The prologue is still more a “test” for my writing skill and learning RenPy and DAZ.
    I have done 1 day in one path – and already 200 renders.
    Doing simple math would lead to 7000 renders – which is ridiculous. Sure – I can and will reuse them… but…

    I am quite slow with rendering – not my machine, but rather me completing each scene itself. At the current speed – I can’t see me finishing the Prologue in the next year or so…

  12. There is – the last blog post – I ended with my eMail.
    But I don’t mind open discussions either.

    I there are more people interested in communication – I might open a discord server. But for now – this would be a lonely business :-).

  13. Saphfire Avatar
    Saphfire

    Hi, sorry for the late Answer. Yes, somebody added The Couple on F95:

    https://f95zone.to/threads/the-couple-v0-1-alpha-demetos.219273/

    Though i guess you could ask for deletion of this thread if you don´t want it there (yet)?

    I bet that many would be interested if you´d open a discord server.
    Bye for now 🙂

  14. Hahaha – I just read the F95 thread.
    It seems I have to change the name soon – apparently if there is “couple” in the name it must be NTR.

    While there will be in some path – it will not be what “they” expect…
    I won’t participate in that thread… I did not open it… I will not clarify…

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